Scary Story by Jane

The Mysterious Shadow

It was a gloomy autumn evening, and Beatrice was walking home from school. It was just past 7:30 pm, and getting dark. She had stayed late for her friends soccer game, and her parents were working late so they couldn’t pick her up from the school. While Beatrice was walking, she felt like she was being followed. Suspicious, she turns around..but nobody was there. So she carried on with her walk. Still, she felt the presence of someone behind her, watching her every move.

Luckily, Beatrice’s house was right there. She quickly ran up the steps and rang the doorbell. No answer, so Beatrice tried knocking. But not a soul even noticed. She soon realized that no cars, people, or really anything was outside. The streets were empty. It was completely silent. This made her want to crawl into a corner and hide, but just then she remembered the spare key under the door mat. She unlocked the door and darted in her house, relieved.

Beatrice locked the door and sat on the couch.Then the lights flickered, and all power was lost. She looked out the window to see if there was some kind of storm, but there wasn’t even a sign of one. Then she noticed a strange figure in her front yard and gasped, closed the blinds, then called her mom. She still had one bar of service left. It rang for a second, but the line went dead. Beatrice started to feel the air getting thicker and soon it was hard for her to breathe. She decided to stay calm. “This is just a dream,” she said. Suddenly, she heard her lock being picked then the door slowly creaked open, Beatrice heard footsteps coming closer and closer to her. A loud shriek spread across the whole town, and that was the last of Beatrice.

2 thoughts on “Scary Story by Jane

  1. Hi Jane! That was an amazing scary story! I loved it! It gave me chills from the intense detail that you went into. I loved the way you said how the streets were completely empty and scary. I didn’t expect to see the shadow. Your story was so captivating and I loved reading it. Your story this year was so amazing compared to mine last year. I loved your phrasing and I can’t even wonder how good your writing will be next year. Nice Job!

  2. Hi Corinna! I’m so happy you loved my scary story. Thanks for all the really nice compliments!

    From,
    Jane 🙂

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